Describe a crowded place you went to
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Um, last year I go to the Bundlast year I went to the Bund in Shanghai with my friends. There was very many peoplea sea of people and it was very crowded. And we take a lot of photos and soWe took loads of photos, which is why we feel tired. But I think it is good experienceit was a good experience.
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逐句表达升级
Last year I go to the Bund in Shanghai with my friends.
Last National Day, I headed to the Bund in Shanghai with a couple of friends.
改正时态；headed to 比 go to 更口语化。
There was very many people and it was very crowded.
What really stood out to me was the sheer number of people — it was absolutely packed.
What really stood out to me was… 是自然的话语标记；absolutely packed 替代 very crowded。
And we take a lot of photos and so we feel tired.
We took loads of photos, which is why we were completely worn out by the evening.
用 which is why 代替 and so，并改正时态。
易错发音提示
以下是你用到的、中国考生常读错的词。只有标“录音中听到”的条目来自音频模型对这段录音的观察，其余只是提醒，不代表你读错了。
- Shanghai重音在后：shang-HAI。
- crowded结尾 -ded 要读出 /dɪd/，不要吞音。
双版本高分升级回答
保留了原来的经历和顺序，改正时态与冠词，替换了 very many、very crowded 等低阶表达。